“…her, um, feminine wiles…”?!
It’s really the “um” that blew it for me.
I hate to be a pretentious jack ass, but sometimes I can’t help but wonder about writing. I was on the train coming home from a night a Mike and Anna’s when I read that line. I promptly closed the book and started shaking with laughter. And not because the line was meant to be humorous.
Don’t get me wrong. I wouldn’t have bought the last two books if I didn’t like Kristen Britain’s heroine and story. But there are times when the writing really takes me out of it. I hate to say it, but I’ve read some fanfiction that was better written!
And now I’ll go straight to hell. I mean, who am I to criticize…I’m not even published, nor do I have an original story!!
But yeah. Sometimes….the writing…
It’s at least better than the damn kitchen table.
Anything is better than ghetto kitchen table surgery to fix broken ribs…